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Diary of a Terran Soldier

Diary of a Terran Soldier

An Unconventional AAR

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February 14, 2229
Somewhere in Hyperspace

So this is my first journal entry, and the only reason I started keeping one was because Jenkins had one too many beers and got philosophical.

See, we were sitting in mess hall 7117 after training, kicking back and having a couple of beers, and we started reflecting on just how great the ol' "Valley Forge" is. Biggest troop transport in its class, powerful as hell and faster than shit on skates. Anyway, Jenkins started talking about how the really awesome think about the Forge isn't how powerful it is, but how robust it is. Sure, most of the one billion troops it carries are sleeping peacefully in cryo, but there are still about fifty million troops still awake and training, like me and Jenkins.

That number got him even more philosophical. 1 billion. A couple of hundred years ago, that many people was about a quarter of the entire human population in existence. Now we send that many soldiers to far-off worlds to go fight aliens. About half of them get to see home again. So that's five hundred million soldiers dead just like that. Jenkins, being a complete jerk when he gets philosophical, started ranting about how our lives have no meaning in the big picture: we're just casualty number four million six hundred fifty thousand and ninety, not Jimmy Jenkins from Aldebaran.

Anyway, he finally passed out and left me behind to shoulder the weight of his philosophy, and so I figured I may as well try and leave something for posterity behind to prove that Steve Lee of Proxima 7 was more than just a number. More than just another nameless soldier fighting and dying far from home. So here it is, my journal.

Where to start. . . well. My parents were doctors, and we emigrated from Earth to Proxima 7 beacause Earth was getting too crowded and expensive, and we wanted a fresh start. Proxima was where I grew up: it was where I learned to drive, where I had my first kiss and other things that followed, and where the Yor decided to start their invasion.

They hit us without warning: their heavy fighters had shot down our Defenders before we knew what was happening, and then their troop transports started dropping hunter-killers from orbit. Two billion people died in the next four days, including Doctors Crystal and Derek Lee. I, on the other hand, survived, was recruited into the resistance, handed a laser rifle and told to shoot it at anything that didn't have skin. Never fired it once: Earth sent in the cavalry first, and I became yet another refugee running away from the front lines of the Second Interstellar War.

Funny thing is, it wasn't my parents dying that made me join up. It was running away from that fight on that refugee ship. Something about that feeling of being totally helpless and running for your life that I didn't like. Decided I was going to go ahead and take my destiny in my own hands, something like that, be better to be able to shoot back than have to run all the time. I enlisted the moment the refugee ship touched ground again.

Boot camp was eight weeks of hell crammed into six: I can't remember a time when I wasn't cold, hungry, tired, or all three. But soon enough, I'd gone from "This is a plasma rifle, there are many like it but this one is mine," to "I solemnly swear to defend the Terran Alliance and all its interests from all threats domestic and foreign." A couple of hours later, I was on the Valley Forge headed to the front lines.

As "training cadre," we weren't put into cryo, but put into rigorous training: they can do a lot with cryo-hypno, but there are things you have to learn for yourself. I learned how to be a Combat Anti-armor and Tactical Support driver: flivver pilot. If you don't know what we do: take a hovercar, armor it up, and attach a big gun to the top. We're nowhere near as heavy as a real tank, but we're faster, smaller, we have better range, and we're more expendable. The last part is what makes us nervous, and why we get called "eggshells with sledgehammers."

Anyway, Jenkins is waking up, and he'll be totally insufferable when he's hung over, so I'll stop there. Will talk about more when there's more to say.

Ciao
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Nothing like a little time travel! (That's MY understanding of it, any way.)
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I'm not sure why people keep saying "good ending." Please wait until you actually see the words "THE END."

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February 29, 2229 (Iteration Two)
Our Final Stand


Click.

I'd just finished rigging up a whole crapload of blood analogue on an IV drip when Seven's eyes fluttered open. "Ouch," she whispered.

"How ya doin', babe?" I quipped nervously.

"F'rgot to duck," Seven sighed. She glanced down at her tattered uniform, saw that I'd cut most of it away. "Like wh y'see?"

She looked like a mess. It physically hurt to see that gorgeous body torn up so badly, and the field dressings made her look like a patchwork horror movie monster. "Couldn't keep my hands off of ya," I said.

She smiled weakly. "Wait 'ntil 'm feel' bett', an' I'll show you how it really works." She sighed and closed her eyes, and I nearly panicked, but the defibrillator didn't change color to red and start its sequence, so I figured she was fine. I gave her a shot of shock suppressant, and some anesthetic to keep her unconscious, and carried her into the spire room, out of the way of the firefight.

"TRAP!"

I'm not sure how I know that the Yor had set a trap for us. All I knew was that when I grabbed Seven and turned to leave, something made me stop and turn back.

The thing about biological beings is that it's hard to really effectively play dead, because your heart keeps beating and your lungs keep breathing. Yor have no heart and no lungs.

Some of the "corpses" weren't dead after all: they'd been laying there biding their time and waiting for their opportunity, and they saw it when I left the corridor to drag Seven to safety. If they'd waited a moment or two longer, or if I hadn't turned around, they would have killed us all. One and Six would never have seen it coming.

But I did turn around, and they didn't wait.

"BEHIND YOU!" I shouted, and the Yor froze mid-attack.

I remembered what One had said. The Yor were machines: sophisticated machines, but still machines. They did repetitive tasks well, but they didn't adapt well to sudden changes in their world view. Biological minds worked by taking prior patterns and quickly adapting them to new circumstancees. Mechanical minds needed to write up new algorithms and properly weight and arrange them in a decision tree.

I also remembered something else she had said: the Yor don't form personal attachments. Only biological beings do.

That saved One's life. A split second of hesitation and Six pushing her out of the way. The Yor Hunter Killer hit him first, and then the big guy went down with a pair of Yor cutting shears in his gut. One screamed and tried to bring her plasma torch around, and then, I kid you not, I saw Six grab the cutting shears in his bare hands, pull them in until they came out his back, reach up, and tear that Hunter Killer's head off with his bare hands.

The EMP grenade was primed before I'd thought to use it, and it was in the air before I thought to throw it. It went off, and the Yor went down, showering sparks from their casings.

One and I ran to Six's side. It didn't look good. He wasn't hit as bad as Seven, but the wound had hit his liver, and it was leaking blood like a sieve. "Shit, shit, shit, Sov Vekka, Sov Vekka," One whispered. She grabbed coagulating field dressings from her belt pouch and started stuffing them into the wound, around the edges of the shears, which she dared not remove. "Sov Vekka, Imari, Salia Vekkio. . ."

"Sei. Orla Teek," Six replied.

One shook her head. "Nei. Nei, nei, Sovek Yad Chia. . ."

"Sovek Yad Chia." Six touched her face and smiled. "Go."

One closed her eyes, and a tear leaked from the corner of her eye and ran down her face. . . just one. Her eyes opened again, and they were once again as hard as flint and as cold as ice. "Corporal," she said softly. "The detonation wires for the charges. You'll have to tear them loose and bring them here."

"But the detonator. . ."

"EMP pulse. It was a good idea, it saved our lives, but now if we want to set off the charges, someone has to do it manually." She took the detonator from me and showed me how the lights would not turn on, the device had been fried by my EMP grenade. "Six just volunteered."

"Wait. . . set it off manually. . . he'll. . ."

"He'll die anyway. He wants this." One closed her eyes again. "Take care of it. I'll handle the spire and the core." She paused, her hands clenching and unclenching, as if wanting to say more, but there was no way she could say what all three of us knew she wanted to say. Finally, she settled for snapping to attention and giving Six the crispest, finest salute she could, her entire body trembling with the emotions she held back.

Six returned the salute weakly. One turned on her heel and left the room, pausing only to pick up the Interdiction Field Generator Core and carry it into the spire room. I pulled the wires from the explosives, jiggered with the safety devices a bit, and stripped the ends off of two wires before handing them to Six. "Just touch these two together. It'll go off right away. Be careful, you don't want to do it too soon."

"Roger." Six gave me a hard look as he held the wires in his trembling hands. "Good luck."

"You too." If this were a movie, this would have been the time for a manly handshake or hug, but there wasn't time for that because we could already hear the Yor coming down the elevator shaft, and besides, Six's hands were filled with live detonator wires, so I settled for patting his shoulder and running away.

One had made a makeshift barricade out of a wrecked door panel and some broken Yor parts, and she'd already dragged Seven and the Core behind it. I ducked behind the slab of reinforced steel just as Six set off the charges.

Things got very loud for a moment, then very dark.

*****

"Steven. Wake up."

I woke up to the feeling of One's fingertips on my face. "We're alive."

"For now." One helped me sit up, and in the dim light of the spire, I could see that the corridor had collapsed. Where Six and the Yor had been, there was nothing but fallen rock and mangled steel, forming a nearly impenetrable barrier. "Six finished his mission," One said softly.

"He did." I shook my head. "Ears are ringing. . . and I keep hearing scratching noises."

"The Yor are burrowing through the wreckage," One admitted. "They started a few minutes ago."

"Damn, these guys don't give up. . . what do we do now?"

One showed me two wires in her hand, the ends stripped off and taped over lightly, so she could pull off the tape with just a tug of her fingertips. "We wait until they break through, and then we set off the spire charges. We destroy the spire, the Core, and ourselves."

"Doesn't sound like a very good plan to me. . . got any that don't involve dying?"

"No," One admitted. "No weapons. No clever tricks. This is all we have left. We can't let them take us alive, and we can't let them take the Core intact. So. . ." She gestured to the spire and the explosives. "Our last stand."

"Maybe we should set it off now. Save some waiting."

"Maybe. Then again, I don't know. We could get lucky," One admitted.

"Lucky. It would take a miracle," I sighed.

"Yes," One said. "But you never know."

We sat there in the darkness listening to the Yor tunnel through the debris, waiting for them to break through so we could give them one last "fuck you" in the form of a huge explosion. "Liria Mue," One said after a long time.

"What?"

"When we first met, you asked me what my name was. Liria Mue," she said.

"That doesn't sound Terran to me," I said cautiously.

"It's not." She touched the burn scar on her face, and I could see now that it had been deliberately inflicted. "I lied when I said the Arceans went to the Terrans because they wanted to give them time to build the Tir-Quan center. The truth was, they went to my mother first. But my mother didn't believe it would come in time to help us. So. . ." She made a noncommital gesture. "My safety was part of the deal. Six came with me as my bodyguard. I don't think she expected me to actually undergo the training myself."

"Oh." I leaned back and looked up at the ceiling quietly. "Damn. Isn't anyone in the Tir-Quan human?"

"Well, there is Seven," Liria admitted. "And there's you."

"Me?"

"You react fast enough, and you don't leave companions behind. You've certainly got the courage. All you need is the training. You don't have to say yes."

"I'll think about it," I said, knowing that I'd already made my choice. Or perhaps my choice had already been made for me. Jenkins, Higgins, Four and Six had made the choice for me, and paid my price with their blood. It was the least I could do to repay a debt I could never really honor.

I was interrupted out of such cheerful thoughts by a loud rumbling that shook the room like an earthquake. The scratching noises stopped, replaced by panicked Yor beeping, and then by the sound of Yor footsteps racing away. "What the hell was that?" I exclaimed.

I saw One grin again, that same smug grin she'd had earlier. "That," she said, "was our miracle."
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March 9, 2229
Tir-Quan Strike Corvette, TQSC "Carlos Hathcock."


So I had dinner with Three and Five today. They're surprisingly good company for a couple of rodents.

Three was showing me the video that's been going around the nets lately, the one that the news feeds and the politicians have been waving around like a parade banner. It's from the point of view of a soldier on the ground, Major Cecil Sipep's adjutant, documenting the final desperate attack of the Marines on Lentz City.

It starts off with the Marines pinned down by enemy fire. They're low on ammo, and their attack has bogged down, and they've got the grim, resigned looks of men waiting to die and sell their lives dearly.

Then ten thousand things happen at once. First, the coms crackle to life. It's Admiral Westin of Strike Group Valkyrie Blade. "Interdiction Field is down! Good work, boys! Hang on, we're on our way!"

Reports start coming in. General Warren declassifies the existence of Strike Group Valkyrie Blade. On the ground, commanders can see dozens of blue wedges appearing on their strategic screens, with dotted lines showing their plotted course. Three days. Three days and those dozens of blue wedges will be appearing in the skies above our planet.

Then the view shifts, and we hear someone yelling, "Major, it's a goddamn squirrel with a uniform!" Five comes running up, out of breath, his fur scorched and mangled (Three always makes fun of Five at this point, calls him a Snathi barbecue.) He comes bearing the news: a group of Alliance commandos have captured the Interdiction Field Generator, but they're pinned down and they need help.

Things go nuts. Marines start rising up from their foxholes and attacking like madmen. They die, but others keep coming, screaming like banshees, firing their rifles all the way. Major Sipep gets up from his command center and pulls out a pistol. "MOVE it, ladies, they're not paying us by the hour!" There is a brief shot of a Yor Hunter-Killer standing there, confused by the sudden shift in Terran behavior. You can almost see his mechanical brain trying to adjust to the paradigm shift just before a plasma bolt takes his head off.

At this point, the public version of the video skips forward, past about ten minutes of bloody warfare deemed inappropriate for general audiences. The rush has stalled, and the Marines are pinned down again by a Yor heavy weapons nest. Major Sipep is apoplectic. "DAMN it, Marines, MOVE, there are men DYING out there!" he is screaming.

Then the world shakes. Fire rains down from heaven, and everything goes fuzzy.

When the picture comes back, the view centers on one of the most gorgeous sights any mudslogger will ever see: close air support tearing the shit out of the enemy. It's TAS Merrimack, patched together after a couple of emergency repairs in the captured Yor starport. She's battered, she's bruised, she's literally falling apart at the seams (at one point you can see an entire weapons nacelle fall off from the recoil of her own weapons fire) but she's raining down plasma fire into the enemy position, turning the planet's surface to glass. A lucky hit strikes her repulsor systems, and she starts to list and go down. That's when Captain Zhou (Navy Cross, Posthumous) orders the crew to abandon ship. Lifepods race away like shooting stars. A second lucky hit takes out her reactor and she starts spraying coolant like a dying beast.

Everyone runs for cover.

I'm not sure who on the Merrimack managed to hit the emergency reactor core vent, but that's the only reason why anyone who was in Lentz city at the time isn't currently radioactive dust. Instead of exploding, the reactor vented a flame of sun-bright fusion plasma upwards into the atmosphere. The view goes white, then black as the camera struggles to compensate for the sudden flare. Newton's third law comes into effect. The Merrimack slams down like the hammer of God right into the Yor position.

Boom.

When the image returns, things are very dusty and very quiet. There are Marines walking around all over the place, covered in white dust, shell-shocked expressions on their smoke-stained faces. The Lentz palace is gone. Just. . . gone. In its place is a two-hundred meter wide patch of powdered rubble. The Yor are crawling out of the rubble, but they aren't fighting. Too many changes in too short a period of time. Their decision-making software can't hope to compensate.

The rest of the battle isn't so much a fight as it is a slaughter.

*****

I wish I could tell you it all ended happily after that. I especially wish I could tell you that I was able to take Cassandra (you know her as Seven) up on her offer.

That's not to say that she died, but when I brought up the subject by her hospital bed, she just laughed at me. "As much as I'd love that," she purred, giving me that sultry wink of hers, "I'm rather afraid that I prefer to live."

"What do you mean?"

"You don't see it? Liria's staked you out, and that girl doesn't give up a without a fight. Literally. And I'm in no shape to fight an Altarian honor-duel," she said, gesturing to her slowly regenerating legs and body. "Besides, she'll win. You've seen what she can do with that sword of hers."

"That bitch! Who the hell does she thing she is? I'm not a goddamn piece of meat. Doesn't what I want have anything to do with it?" I griped.

"Not at all. Sorry, Steve, I think you're doomed," Cassie teased. Then she went serious, the way she sometimes does. "Seriously, Steven, give her a chance. I know she's not as tasty as I am, and she's as cold as ice and she's got no charm whatsoever, but she's actually really nice if you can get past that prickly outer shell."

"I can't see how I'd ever do that. She's worse than a porcupine."

"If you still feel the same after I get out of this hospital bed, then we'll talk. Or, who knows, maybe you can talk her into something. . . mmm. . . adventurous." She winked at me. "Anyway, you'd better get going. It's almost time for my sponge bath, and there's this male nurse on this ship that's absolutely gorgeous. I'm trying to see if I can get him to give me a really thorough cleaning, if you know what I mean."

I laughed. "You're incorrigible."

"Absolutely." She winked and blew me a kiss. "See you around, Steven. Good luck with Liria."

"I think I'm going to need it."

There's an old Chinese saying: 'Speak of Cao Cao, and Cao Cao arrives.' Liria was standing outside the sickbay when I walked out. "I don't see any lipstick on your collar. Maybe you're not completely degenerate after all," she said.

"It's not on my collar," I quipped.

"Pervert." She turned on her heel and jabbed a finger into my chest. "Unlike some Tir-Quan who will remain unnamed, I expect my partners to have a certain bit of decorum and restraint. So you'll act in a manner more befitting of a soldier from this point forward."

"Partner. . . who the hell decided that I'm YOUR partner?"

"I did. I'm the First, remember? I've got certain rights and privileges. You can, of course, appeal them, but you should know I have a certain weight with them as well. You are the first new recruit for Tir-Quan training in months, and I will be damned if I let the corps degenerate any further than it has."

She walked me all the way to the shuttle ranting about her expectations, basically acting like a mother hen and basically laying out a whole series of expectations for my training and my professional development. It was a relief when I finally got on the shuttle and she left me alone.

I'm on my way to the Tir-Quan center now to start my training. I guess I should be nervous, but honestly, I'm more annoyed. Liria's really starting to get on my nerves, and I can't stand to be around her longer than a few minutes at a time. Cassie's wrong. No way in hell I'll ever get used to that psycho bitch.

Anyway, that's it for now. Tir-Quan training's supposed to be hush hush top secret, so they've told me I can't write down anything about it. Since I won't be doing much of anything else for the next few months, I guess I may as well put this short-lived diary aside.

I guess it's served its purpose, anyway. I'm not just a name, and neither is Jenkins. Heck, maybe he was wrong in the first place. Sure, maybe to the stranger, any individual soldier isn't much more than a number, but maybe he was asking the wrong people. Maybe he should talk to someone like me, someone whose life was directly affected by those men, someone who'll never forget names like Josh Higgins, Jeremiah Jenkins, Ts'chulin'e Jorv'ak, and Orwill Lien.

Someone like me.


Steven Yow-Chun Lee
March 10, 2229
On my way to Tir-Quan training.
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You should write a GalCiv2 novel.

Seriously.
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EPILOGUE

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February 28, 2231
TAAT "Battle of Lentzlandians"
Location Classified


I got a letter from Liria today. She reminded me that it's been two years since that day on Lentzlandians when we all thought it was over. She was also incredibly pissed off. I'm not sure who told her about my rendezvous with Cassie, but when I find out, I'm going to deliver some pain.

Come to think of it, maybe it was Cassie herself who told her. It's the sort of thing Seven would do. Stir up trouble for the sake of causing trouble. Actually, now that I think about it. . . okay, if I die, I didn't die a natural death, I was the victim of what is looking more and more like a wrong-headed attempt to get a slightly psychotic Altarian amazon soldier girl who has been pining after a guy for two damn years to get off her ass, swallow her pride, and do something instead of moping around acting all cool and spartan about it.

Great. Now I feel all cheap and used. Thanks a lot, Seven.

Anyway, after that I decided to get the hell out of my quarters on the off-chance that One would somehow travel all the way from the Training Center out to the front lines to personally relieve me of my testicles. Officially, I've got no place being on the bridge of a combat vessel, given that I'm a ground pounder, and the Navy is notoriously condescending to us mudfoots. Especially since according to the regs, I'm officially a "civilian advisor," and not supposed to be here in the first place. Still, everyone knows what a black ninja-suit with no insignia means, so people tend to look the other way.

I had another reason, of course. This is the last of the old Terran worlds we're taking back from the Yor, and the first one that was taken: Proxima 7. The bones of Derek and Crystal Lee are down there somewhere, as well as a lot of ghosts from my past. So in a way, it was kind of a religious thing. Put the past to rest.

The planet looks different from orbit. There's not much green left, for one thing: it's mostly Yor construction zones now, and the oceans aren't as blue as they used to be. But it's still home. I've been away for a long time, and coming back feels. . . right somehow. Good and proper.

It's a stunning sight. The Yor fleets are backed up around the orbit of the planet, those fleets of frigates and fighters buzzing like bees around a hive, but that strength is deceptive. In the past ten engagements, the Terran fleet have incurred a fifteen-to-one kill ratio against the Yor: even after they developed point defense systems to counter our missiles, we managed to keep ahead of them by switching over to a new type of energy cannon called the phasor that makes plasma weapons look like child's toys. Nothing stops it: not armor, not point defense. Maybe a sufficiently powerful energy shield could attenuate it, but the Yor don't react that quickly, and they have trouble anticipating our actions. Even if they could develop shielding, the scientists are currently working on something even nastier than the phasor, something that they tried out in ground combat but didn't work because atmosphere attenuates the beam too quickly. No atmosphere in space, so maybe it will work better there.

There have been other developments. The Arceans are back, even though they were never really gone: we gave the surviving nomads the Hatch system as a gesture of thanks for their role in saving all our lives, and they immediately set about doing what proud warrior races do: building up a small but insanely effective fleet of war ships and getting ready to go get themselves gloriously killed in battle. We also loaned them a couple of our best Tir-Quan to help train their soldiers: Three and Five tell me that life with the Arceans is fun, if rather. . . one-dimensional. Or, as Three put it, "These guys seriously need to get laid. If I hear one more song about dying gloriously in battle, I think I'm gonna give some of these booger-faces what they want." Five says he's up to a pack of cigarettes a day, unfiltered.

I don't blame him: despite the fact that the Yor war has turned around, things are looking a bit bleak. Word is that the Drengin are in the middle of a civil war: one of their most powerful clans has broken off from the Empire, and from what I hear, these Korath make your run of the mill Drengin look like Polyanna. We're trying to get the Arceans and the Altarians back on their feet so we don't have to fight a three-front war: it's slow going, but it looks like it might happen. Meanwhile, the Korx have been sucking up to us, mostly because we found out just who leaked the fact that the Arceans had handed over a secret infantry training technique to the Terrans to the Yor, and they're doing some quick spin control to try and avoid experiencing Tir-Quan wrath first-hand. There are rumors that the Drath don't like seeing the Altarians recovering from the Yor attacks, and they might do something to stop that recovery from ever happening. The scariest rumors, though, are those of a small red vessel on the edges of known space that's shown up, blown the living shit out of any fleets it encounters, and then just vanishes into the black.

That's for later. For now, the drop master has called everyone to Ready Two status, and we're getting ready for a drop. I think I'll go check up on the CATs squad, make sure their flivvers are working properly. I destroyed a lot of wrenches throwing them into transmission streams, but it got the message across that my CATs teams, at least, will either drop with fully working flivvers or they will not drop at all.

It's good to be a Tir-Quan.

Steve

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**THE END**
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~waits for it~ OH, there it is...THE END, now we can say it guys lol.

Great story, cool ending. Now, I'll be waiting for the sequel involving the Korath and the 'mysterious red ship'. I think if Steve though the Yor were a pita to fight as a mudfoot, I can't wait until he gives it to the DLs. Teer-Quan or no, that'll be a good fight.
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Author's Notes (i.e. Stuff you probably don't care about)

Thanks for all your support, everyone Writing this as a serial over a period of a couple of weeks was incredibly fun, and I hope you enjoyed it as much as I did.

A brief history: when I first joined the GCII forums, one of the things I most enjoyed was reading through the AARs, especially Frogboy's own stories about testing out the AI. One of the ones I stumbled across was an older AAR called "The Ship That Won The War," a tribute by a GCII player to the Small and Tiny ships that he fought the first battles of his campaign with. That reminded me of a game when my "Abh Empire" flagship, "Abriel," somehow picked up so many ship upgrade anomalies that when I upgraded it to a combat vessel, it had something like 100+ hit points and could take down entire fleets on its own. I reframed it as a story about the Terran Alliance (who wants to read a story about a custom race based on an anime series, anyway?) and called it "Goodbye to an Old Friend." People seemed to like it. I asked for suggestions. General Homsar suggested a story from a soldier's perspective.

Thus, "Diary of a Terran Soldier."

Some acknowledgements: the story isn't based on any one campaign, mostly the flavor text that crawls by when you first successfully invade a planet. The general plot itself is basically a blatant ripoff of Heinlein's "Starship Troopers" (Johnny Rico/Steve Lee fights a losing battle against the Bugs/Yor, gets picked up by Rasczak's Roughnecks/the Tir-Quan, and comes back to help capture the Brain Bug/Yor Interdiction Field Generator Core in a desperate underground battle), but with more girls. Steve's situation with his flivver is based on my cousin Josh's own experiences with his Humvee before heading off to fight in Iraq: unlike Steve, Josh got a replacement vehicle before he went into combat, and spent most of Operation Steel Curtain quietly (at least, that's my understanding). The poem that Six recites is, of course, "Charge of the Light Brigade" by Alfred, Lord Tennyson. Anyone who's read Dune probably knows where the majority of my version of the Tir-Quan's training comes from.

Seven fans can thank Jazmin (not her real name) for Cassandra's survival: the original concept of the ending had Seven dying of her wounds before she could be rescued, with One and Steve the only survivors. Perhaps unsurprisingly, Seven turned out to be more popular than I'd anticipated. I was tempted to kill her off anyway (kill your darlings) but when I mentioned this to Jazmin, she told me she hated it when authors killed characters off just to be angsty, so Seven lives to fight and. . . fornicate. . . another day.

Answers to a couple of questions people asked.


1. What the heck was up with the block of text in italics? Was it time travel?
A. Not quite. Remember that (my version of) Tir-Quan training revolves around anticipating future events. What happened here was that in some alternate timeline (Iteration One), Steve never saw the Yor sneak attack coming and everyone died. In the canon timeline (Iteration Two) Steve felt alternate Steve's anguish at not being able to save his friends and anticipated the trap. Hence, Apprentice Mirris' comment on Premonition.

2. Will you write a novel?
A. If I can be bothered to get off my butt and write one, yes. I tend towards short stories, because, honestly, I get bored easily. This is one of the longer pieces I've written, and doing it as a serial was a lot of fun. I'll let you know in the off-topic forum if and when it happens.

3. Will you write a GalCiv novel?
A. Don't count on it. This is Brad's setting, Brad's story, Brad's playground, Brad's sandbox, I just showed up with my shovel and a bucket to build a sandcastle. It would be awesome if the devs read this and enjoyed the story, but the story is mostly for the fans who love this game.

4. Will there be a sequel?
A. Probably not. But if there is one, it will cover Steve and the Tir-Quan facing down the Korath Clan and the resurgent Dread Lords.

4. Four is a Jessuins? Three and Five are Snathi?
A. Immigrants or refugees, obviously.

6. I'm imagining Seven as a sexy blonde Altarian. . .
A. By now you know that's not quite right. Seven is Terran. But as for the appearances of the cast: I figure Six looked a lot like the Altarian leader from Dread Lords (I can't remember his name, but he had a blond crew cut.) One looks a lot like Elyse Mue from Dark Avatar, being her daughter (the scar on her face I mentioned at her first appearance is from burning off the traditional tattoos. Three and Five are obviously Chip and Dale. Four is a Jessuins, and weren't you surprised to know what they've got off-screen . Two and Eight no one really saw much of, so they're rather nebulous. As for Seven. . . well, every guy has a different opinion of what is sexy, so just imagine the sexiest woman you can think of and that's her. I know my mental image is a blonde with a great butt. . . anyway.

Final acknowledgements: GalCiv II belongs to Stardock, and so do all the elements from that game included in the story. Thank you, Jazmin, for not being more pissed off that I'm spending so much time writing a video game fanfiction. Thanks for reading this story and enjoying it. It might be a while before I write another AAR given other projects and real life concerns: if and when I do, it will focus on either the influence warfare concept or Technological Victory (probably the latter, there's actually an AAR in here already that does a great job of portraying a culture war between the Iconians and the Terrans. . .)
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This story is one of those things you wish could just keep going on and on, because of how excellent it is. But you know that it will have to end eventually... Unfortunatly, instead of keeping the good things going, you end up with endless "new" Sonic games, and Shreck movies.  

P.S.- I luv U Seven!
Reply #85 Top
Claps hands and stands up for an extended ovation!!!!

A sequel with the Korath and the DL...why not turn that into your tech victory..The war was going so badly against the forces of korath and the DL incursions that the only way to win was to abandon violence and pursue a more spiritual means...

Sounds good to me, you will need the Tir Quan of course to hold off the invading forces long enough to achieve a tech victory...

Well done and i wait for more.


Reply #86 Top
I typically hate fan fiction. After spending a few hours looking over the AARs in here, no offense people, but I wasn't surprised to find that I still hated fan fiction.

Until I read this one.

This story may not win a pulitzer prize, but I am having a lot of troubling keeping my prior prejudices intact. It's like hating the ignorance one perceives in Southerners and then meeting one who embodies everything redneck, but quotes Shakespeare and studies advanced Calculus for fun.

Fortunately for me, I'll be able to block this story out and revive my narrow-minded views in a few months. I know my feeble brain can't handle being forced to open up without self-destructing....

Seriously, great job with this story.
Reply #87 Top
Well done, themocaw. Having also tried my hand at writing science fiction, and knowing how difficult it can be, I really appreciate how well crafted this story was. Aside from a few very minor complaints, I thought your story was brilliant. I'll be looking forward to reading any other fiction you write.
Reply #88 Top
Wow... my writing efforts appear paltry in comparison to yours... excellent. I love the style of your writing, it is very similar to mine (probably why I was never lost while reading it, I actually paid attention to the chronology ). And as I am re-reading Starship Trooper's for the nth time, I can see the similarities, but while they are similar, don't let that degrade your work in your own mind, it is a spectacular work all its own.

Well done and I look forward to the next!


PS: Have you ever considered posting the whole thing to another website? such as Deviantart or Eflwood? (I am members of both, and this is the kind of stuff they eat up)
Reply #89 Top
Ok, I just have one question. Is there really an interdiction field generator? If so, where is it on the tech tree? And what does it do? (I'm assuming decrease spped of enemy ships.)
Reply #90 Top
Ok, I just have one question. Is there really an interdiction field generator? If so, where is it on the tech tree? And what does it do? (I'm assuming decrease spped of enemy ships.)


No, the "slow-down-enemy-ships" effect is part of the Yor super ability, it happens automaticlly.
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Ok, I just have one question. Is there really an interdiction field generator? If so, where is it on the tech tree? And what does it do? (I'm assuming decrease spped of enemy ships.)


No, the "slow-down-enemy-ships" effect is part of the Yor super ability, it happens automaticlly.


There is a starbase module that does something similar called the Warp Field Inhibitor, I think. Anyway, it's a macguffin, trying to explain why the heck the Yor can do that sort of thing. . . and a bit of wish fulfillment regarding my frustrations at seeing my lightning-fast Victory-Class cruisers turned into paperweights ;_;
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PS: Have you ever considered posting the whole thing to another website? such as Deviantart or Eflwood? (I am members of both, and this is the kind of stuff they eat up)



I have a DevArt site (mocaw) but the thing is, they probably wouldn't "get" this story. There's a lot in it that you wouldn't "get" unless you've played this wonderful yet admittedly slightly niche game.
Reply #93 Top
themocaw, once again let us say "great story".

And hopefully I'm not the only one that missed the connection at first, but realizing Liria's parentage absolutely gave me chills.
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You have my respect, Themocaw.
Any AAR you write, I read!
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And everyone lives happily ever after, unless your a yor, in which case you don't know what happiness is anyway, so you can't feel it.

  
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Hi!
A very good fanfic!   
Maybe a bit too fast (to action-movie like), but it kept me intrigued until the end. You also managed to finish writing the story quite fast, for what I'm thankful, because I couldn't stand waiting for the end for a whole month.

IMO this story shows clearly we need a new subforum: GalCiv fanfic.

BR, Iztok
Reply #99 Top
Hi!
A very good fanfic!   
Maybe a bit too fast (to action-movie like), but it kept me intrigued until the end. You also managed to finish writing the story quite fast, for what I'm thankful, because I couldn't stand waiting for the end for a whole month.

IMO this story shows clearly we need a new subforum: GalCiv fanfic.

BR, Iztok


I think we also need a fanart site for people like Formis, who rock hardcore.