Journeys

Um, yeah, it has potential.  Of course, the story in its entirety would make more sense and explain in greater detail the characters and events, etc, but you certainly have the basis for something quite good there.

Agree... God sh*t, but want more to understand more.

Glad you´re alive and kicking ass again Uvah. All worked out with the stuff you said were coming your way ? If not PM ME !! 

Uvah... keep writing! Keep trying, man... never give up. Faith, hope and effort.

It will get better.

I loved it..... I want more..... it had me from the start and my imagination went into overdrive......that is good writing babe,

Just one question!  Is it too late to fit in a paragraph or two about Mr.Chow?

When it gets a little further along and as for Mr. Chow ...... ha ha. I'm working on a synopsis and will post it here soon.

 What genre is this, sci-fi? Off the bat, the idea of 'A newly formed family unit calling itself Kierelel' sounds interesting. Then you have the plus of strong females of equal capabilities with their 'brother'. Yeah, I think it has potential, and I'd like to know more about this world. I could go on, but I'm a member of a large online writing critique group and I tend to be hyper-critical about these things...lol.  

How far along are you on this story? Definitely keep writing.

I'm working on the final revision. There are six books total. The first five tell of the families beginnings over a span of two hundred years. The last what this family has created as it is one thousand years into their future. One of the main characters:

Anna Seelya R'Mae ... 5 foot nothing .... platinum blonde with a gold streak down the middle. Big blue eyes, pug nose and a perky smile with pointed ears. Her father is the founder of the Assassins Guild and she is trained as one. Seely, as she is called, is all of 17 years old as we measure time. On her native world of Eesira one of our years equals three of theirs. Seely is the last of the Eesirans. More to come.....

omfg......thats hot......

Cool, so it's high fantasy. You've written six books? Wow, that's quite a lot of work, a major accomplishment in and of itself. Best of luck with this.

Tomorrow ......

Standing off the fifth planet's small moon Raptor opens up with all four pulsar arrays targeting Shiata Six dead center. The planet explodes in a shower of meteoric debris taking four thousand Orion slavers with it. Raptor then turns and her captain orders all engines to full power, redlining the cores to one hundred fifteen percent. His only hope is that Raptor holds together long enough to reach home. Nineteen critically injured lives depend on...............

She's an inspiration for a Windowblind, isn't she?

And much, much more... but then I'm probably dreaming about a whole 'nother ballpark, where the impossible becomes reality.

But yeah, she sounds smokin' hot.

What? No 'It was a dark and stormy night?'

Looks like a good start. Be interesting to see what else shapes up.

Hope things are starting to go better for you, I only just now caught up on threads about the crap you were going through lately.

hell yeah, think gestapo blonde baby....... me and uvah must be drinking the same water.. xxx

if you get published.......im gonna buy them Ross, you can count on it hey...... i want them !!!!

Yeah, I know, might have to come up with another one, but have always been a huge Marvin fan

Excerpt - Chapter One

     "FIRE!" The order was given. Raptor, standing off the fifth planet's small moon, opened up with all four pulsar arrays targeting Shiata Six dead center. Once a notorious venue for the buying and selling of slaves, long abandoned and used this one time as a prison for nineteen special captives Shiata Six explodes in a shower of meteoric debris taking four thousand Orion slavers with it. The great starship shudders under the impact as the shock wave passes over it. Raptor then turns and her captain orders all engines to full power, redlining the cores to one hundred fifteen percent, leaving behind a rocky debris field and the end of a nightmare. Nineteen critically injured girls depend on her and the captain's only hope is that Raptor holds together long enough to reach home.

     In the ship's sickbay triage teams work feverishly to stabilize the former captives. Meatball surgery it was called back in the day. Assess their injuries, repair what you can and stabilize them for transport to a medical facility better equipped to handle them. In this case that facility is on another world many light years distant.

     "Ops ... signal ahead. Our ETA is twelve minutes. Tell Dante we have them. Sickbay ... your status?" Captain J'Don is pacing his bridge, silently wishing his ship could move faster. They had succeeded in rescuing the nineteen captives but the second team leader, remaining behind to cover their escape, was caught in the backlash of an explosion and now lies near death, her back ripped to shreds.

     "We're working on it captain." Doctor Timoney, his gloved hands stained in blood, stood over one of the victims whose legs had been smashed. He managed to remove the fragments but the bones themselves would have to be replaced.

     "Doctor ... the commander ..."

     "Bumps and bruises captain but don't count on him any time soon, he's needed" Ripping off the gloves doctor Timoney deposited them in waste disposal, selected another pair and moved on to the next patient. This ones arms were severely fractured in four places. She too would need bone replacements. In fact all of them will. These girls are in bad shape. Some of them will be lucky to survive.

     "Doctor ... Anna ...is she ..." J'Don is getting anxious.

     "Captain ... the commander has her. I'll give you an update when I can. Orderly. This ones ready. Next."

     On the bridge the Ops officer turned in his seat. "Captain ... escorts picked up several bogies on intercept."

     "Let them deal with 'em. Helm ... kick it!"

     "Aye sir. New ETA ... six minutes." Engines screaming, cores pushed beyond acceptable limits Raptor shuddered violently.

     "C'mon baby c'mon. Five more minutes!" Grasping the back of his center seat J'Don is cursing up a blue streak. His ship may be old and battered but she still has some life left to her.

to be continued ...

Yup, this is shaping up very nicely, Uvah me old mate, very nicely indeed.

The arrival ...............

     "Message from Sanctuary captain." Trish, at Ops, turned in her seat. "Healer Dante says the infirmary is clear and teams are standing by. She requests an update."

     "Tell Dante they're alive. We'll be there in less than five minutes and have transport ready. Ours is down and its not coming back."

      "Aye sir. Message sent."

      "Bridge ... sickbay. Our patients are stable but Commander Daniken will not be able to return. He's been usurped." Doctor Timoney looked over at the Regen chamber Anna was placed in. Her injuries was so grievous, so extensive that ordinary surgery was out of the question. Only in the Regeneration Chamber does she stand any chance and with the commander by her side, holding her hand, the odds were better than even, not much but better.

     "Here commander ... drink this." An orderly handed Daniel a tall fruit drink laced with potent vitamins. He'll need it because Anna is taking his life force through the contact and using it to stay alive.

     "Thank you Ensign." His voice was barely above a whisper and throaty. The drain on him was tremendous. He was at the beam out point when Anna was brought up, face down on a grav sled and encased in a stasis field. He had reached out to take her hand, lend his support because she was still conscious but Anna grasped his hand so tightly he cried out and she was not letting go. So here he was, sitting beside this diminutive girl with platinum blonde hair and big blue eyes letting her have all the energy she needs.

     Sanctuary's transports were ready when Raptor made orbit and the beam down commenced even before Raptor's engines shut themselves down, their cores burnt to a crisp. Raptor had seen her last mission.

     The triage teams, led by Healer Dante, immediately went to work. Specialist were on hand along with a team of geneticists from nearby Dreima. They were called in when Doctor Timoney relayed their condition to Sanctuary.

     Several grueling hours had passed before Healer Dante declared them all out of danger. All but young Anna who was waging a desperate battle to survive. Twice she had flat lined and twice they were able to bring her back. Healer Dante had induced coma to lessen the strain on Anna's already weakened systems. She checked on the commander who looked sallow because of the drain on his. Somehow Anna was channeling his life force, aggressively, to augment her own. How, she had no idea, but then again no one knew that much about Anna to begin with.

next ..... found in space

I'm entranced.       If this was a book in front of me, I wouldn't be able to put it down. Or a tv program, couldn't shut it off.               

:')   Sad about Raptor. She sounded Valiant.   

Uvah, your book is so cool. Must say that Anna sounds delightful.  

May I have some more, pleease?

Found in Space .....

     She was only onboard Raptor for three days before Captain J'Don got the call. Before that Raptor was involved in an ongoing search for the slaver ship when her sensors detected a life pod floating in space. He interrupted their search long enough to investigate and much to his surprise the capsule was occupied. That's how they found Anna, held in suspended animation and asccording to the data cubes found in her capsule Anna had been floating in space for three hundred years!

     They knew she came from a world called Eesira, a world that had crossed over that many years ago. They also knew that the girls they had rescued all came from another world named Selene that had also crossed over and was a colony to Eesira. 

     The Orion slaver they were searching for had been found orbiting Shiata Six by a trader who frequents the area. The trader sent an emergency message to Sanctuary. He knew they were involved in a search and rescue operation and that this was the ship they wanted.

     The Orion slaver had been taken, its crew executed on Captain J'Don's orders. They found a Travelers vessel locked down in its main cargo hold. Upon further investigation they were able to determine who these girls were, where they were taken from and their place of origin. 

     This is why Shiata Six had to be destroyed. Not only to eliminate that many more slavers but to eliminate any and all evidence of the girls existence. Too many entities in this part of the galaxy would give their right arm to possess these girls, control them, use them for their own ends. Fortunately J'Don got to them first.

A brief history of who these girls are and why they are so important: Oldest first

                                              Planet of Origin   Adopted world     

Elizabeth Montgomery 'Liz' age 26      Selene                 Earth

Elizabeth Nguyen 'Beth'            25          "                        "

Elizabeth Cummins 'Betty'        25          "                        "

Jessica Armstrong                   24          "                        "

Jennifer Duquayne 'Jen Jen'     24          "                        "

Jewel Armee                           23          "                        "

Kara Tovany                           23          "                        "

Eleanna Tayla                         22          "                    Rivanu

Kiras                                      21          "                    Ronosa

Holly Simmons                        21          "                    Earth

April Summers                         21          "                      "

Jamie Lee Scranton                  21          "                      "

Riaal                                      20          "                    Aurelia

Angelica Morris 'Angel'              20          "                    Earth

Erica Jones                              19          "                      "

Noki Tonega                            19          "                     E'Tosha

Yoshi Tomitsu                          18          "                     Earth

Sarah Whitefeather                   18          "                       "

Mae'Ling Cheung                      18          "                       "

Why they are so important: They are Indigo children, the next step in human evolution. You would think that this means they possess some kind of arcane abilities and you would be right, to a point. They are Elementals. They can manipulate the world around them. Earth, Wind, Fire and Air but ... these are not arcane by no means. Their abilities are a result of a form of technology developed on Eesira ... ready ... five million years ago! A technology that has evolved over that time until you have what is called ..... magic. Nah ... just kidding. There is nothing magical about it. They use the power of their minds.

     If you're an UFO enthusiast you'll appreciate this part. There have been many unsubstantiated accounts of UFO abductions. In this case they're true. All nineteen of these girls were abducted from Earth by the Orion slavers. This is the part I like. They were taken at different times as in years. I mentioned a Travelers vessel. This Traveler came from the future circa 4992. In his time these girls are history in that they are partially responsible for many of the advances in peace that are a part of his time. He is an historian and it was his research that brought him back to the year 2886 to record the appearance of these girls on the galactic stage. 

     The Orions intercepted his vessel mistaking him for a trader. They managed to board his vessel, kill him and take his ship. They soon learned that what they had was a time ship. What's more they learned why he was there and who he was looking for. The Orions treat their females like property to be bought and sold and they figured these girls would fetch a mighty high price because of who they are. So they used his ship to go back in time to abduct them. Now ... Orions are not as smart as they'd like to think they are. They did manage to find the appropriate years where these girls were but on their return one of the values was off and deposited them in an alternate reality in which these girls are instrumental in bringing down their slave empire. They were held in captivity for five long years before being rescued by Raptor.

Next. Who is Anna Seelya R'Mae?

Uvah, you write the way I like it.... sci-fi and aliens, I just love it.

  Woo Hoo   Cool stuff Uvah.