Ode to a passing girl...

from JoeUser Forums

Beauty like a vacuum

Sucks the breath out of me

I can't look at her

She's too bright to see

Tangled dark on her head

It's a sweet abyss

I'm captured forever by her

Brilliant, radiant bliss

 

Beauty like a dagger

Piercing my skin

Etched in the flesh of my heart

A tattoo of my sin

I can barely see her

She's a flashing star

I'm caught in her gravity

Destined to circle her from afar

 

Beauty like a parade

Dazzling pageantry

I can't take her all in

She's too much for me

I'm a lonely watcher

Waving as she passes by

Then the parade is gone,

And I'm left alone

Without a chance to say goodbye

 

 

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Reply #1 from JoeUser Forums Top

Very nice, mate.  I really liked it. :D

~Zoo

Reply #2 from JoeUser Forums Top
Oh HELLS yeah. Been there about a million times before.

Nice writing, Maso.
Siege of Centauri
Reply #3 from JoeUser Forums Top

Zoo,

Thanks mate.  It happens regularly

SanCho,

Been there about a million times before

Yes, it is part of the male condition, right? :)

Reply #4 from JoeUser Forums Top

That passing girl must get around because not only did I see her today I seen her yesterday, too.

 

Nice work, mate.

Reply #5 from JoeUser Forums Top

not only did I see her today I seen her yesterday, too.

Wow, she does get around because I saw her this morning too.  :)

Reply #6 from JoeUser Forums Top
That passing girl must get around because not only did I see her today I seen her yesterday, too.


She was in front of me at the grocery store just yesterday! God, but I hate to stare but sometimes I can't help myself. This was a good one that touch a nerve as I note all the guy's comments here!  :) 
Reply #7 from JoeUser Forums Top

This was a good one that touch a nerve as I note all the guy's comments here!

I figured it would.  She is unavoidable, it seems.